An orchestra blasts as the curtain closes at the end of a performance and as the speaker approaches the stage microphone.
“Thank you all for your presence tonight! Deepest apologies, but one of our premium performers cancelled and we’ve allowed a peasant from the coast named, hmm hmm, Scott Mitchell to recite HIS FIRST sonnet during intermission. Perhaps use this time to visit the restrooms or getting refreshments.”
A small gang of teenagers snicker as they disperse rotten tomatoes to their mates, in preparation to bombard the stage.
As bagpipes begin to play softly, the teens resist the urge and a curious audience returns to their seats.
Seated in the center of the stage, with long hair blocking view of his downward staring face, is the peasant using a candle as his reading light. The musicians pause and then start again, synchronous, as he begins reading…
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“Throwing bottles to the sea with last hopes
replies from the queen were to no avail
In each, contained a small piece of his heart
each one was destined to where he once sailed
Spent himself, he did, on rejecting ears
her angel eyes he dreamed of, turned away
Accepting the fate of all of his fears
moments shared with others did not ease pain
In dark days he accepted his demise
seduced to follow a new warrior’s quest
Still, echoes of memories pierced his eyes
yearning for one more chance to give his best
Outside the queen’s window, a proof of sort
undying love in bottles filled her port”
~
Scott Mitchell
April 16th, 2012 at 12:04 pm
oh, Scott, once again a poem to bring tears to my eyes. so heartwrenching, so beautiful.
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April 16th, 2012 at 1:48 pm
Thanks Susanne! This was my first attempt at a sonnet. I have to go see if something is new on your site!
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April 16th, 2012 at 12:55 pm
awwww..this is lovely..
I liked the speakers introduction..”Perhaps use this time to visit the restrooms or getting refreshments” 😛
You have a way of capturing an audience..I smiled when I read “her angel eyes he dreamed of” that’s a beautiful line 🙂
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April 16th, 2012 at 1:51 pm
Thanks so much! Well, this is my first sonnet and I think it’s not a very popular genre in modern times, but I did my best to abide by the requirements to be a legit sonnet
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April 16th, 2012 at 1:55 pm
lol @ the term ‘legit sonnet’
Sounds very much so if I do say so myself..but then again I’m impartial to this writer 😀
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April 16th, 2012 at 1:13 pm
Fantastic! 🙂
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April 16th, 2012 at 1:51 pm
Thank you!
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April 16th, 2012 at 2:02 pm
“Echoes of memories pierced his eyes” I like that you used eyes…I think they are the entrance to our souls and hearts… I enjoy the vision you created with the introduction. I felt like an audience member, and my response a resounding applause. Well done!
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April 17th, 2012 at 12:51 pm
Thanks boomiebol! It’s incredible for me that you would say that about the eyes. I’ve always said the exact same thing. Some people don’t understand what I’m saying with it, but you clearly do understand
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April 17th, 2012 at 12:58 pm
:).. my high school principal, an Irish Nun always looked into our eyes when she was talking to us, there was no way we could lie or hide anything. And ever since I believed there were more the eyes could reveal
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April 16th, 2012 at 2:22 pm
You always spark my heart and water my eyes with your beautiful poems. Scott!
I would never use your time on a stage to take and intermission….no way.
Hugs, xx
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April 17th, 2012 at 12:52 pm
Thanks Debbie! And no throwing tomatoes at me either ok? 😀
Hope you are well sweetie! Hugs!
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April 16th, 2012 at 2:56 pm
This sonnet tugs at my heart, and beautifully, clear visual images! That is passion. . .
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April 17th, 2012 at 12:57 pm
thanks Janet! I felt very passionate writing it and did my best to capture that, but it was a little difficult keeping it all to 10 syllable lines 😀
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April 16th, 2012 at 5:11 pm
No comment; just 😥
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April 17th, 2012 at 1:02 pm
Thank you Mira Jay for the shared tears. I always prefer to write of hope and love, but sometimes the 😦 things just come out.
Hugs to you!
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April 17th, 2012 at 2:12 pm
writing is by our hand yet never in it…
Thanks; I need some; it’s not my shining part of time..
Peace
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April 16th, 2012 at 5:42 pm
Scott, what can I say? You never cease to amaze me, even with your clever and witty introductions, you pull the reader (audience) in! What a beautiful first sonnet, though, of course, first is irrelevant because it doesn’t seem like a “first!” Always awesome, emotional and beautiful! Hugs and smiles! 🙂
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April 17th, 2012 at 1:05 pm
Thanks so much Lauren. It always means a lot coming from you. Your writing is exquisite and I know you put so much heart into it always. Hugs and smiles back to you!
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April 16th, 2012 at 6:50 pm
Hip, Hip, Hooray For Scott, who saved the day! Very nicely done my friend as only you can do! Loved it!
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April 17th, 2012 at 1:08 pm
Thanks Wendell! Every one of your words are always an inspiration for me, as you’ve been in the business longer and obviously one of the best out there!
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April 16th, 2012 at 9:42 pm
Beautiful poetry. I love Enya! Nicely done!
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April 17th, 2012 at 1:10 pm
Thanks! Yes, I love her music too. It was just coincidence for me to find this one though with the bagpipes. It was better than the other options I found. I appreciate your time here and your comment!
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April 16th, 2012 at 10:06 pm
I really love this offering, Scott! Beautifully expressed.
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April 17th, 2012 at 1:12 pm
Thank you very much Virginia! I imagine you’ve noticed I like your work too. Many nature and seasonal tributes that feel almost meditative to read. Keep it up!
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April 17th, 2012 at 7:24 am
Love for both Enya and the sonnet.
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April 20th, 2012 at 1:50 pm
Thanks ruthpinto! Sorry for my late reply. I somehow didn’t see this. My fault, as I wait to long to come and reply and have 50 waiting for me 😀 Have a great weekend!
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April 21st, 2012 at 1:44 am
Ah, no worries. Hope your weekend is wonderful too!
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April 17th, 2012 at 9:58 am
You make my heart “sigh” everytime… Beautiful…
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April 17th, 2012 at 1:16 pm
Thanks GG! Always appreciate you here. I was reading your blog and I know I was a follower before, but had to click follow again. I think when I changed my gravatar and wordpress settings it affected subscriptions. Anyway… always love your writing!
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April 17th, 2012 at 10:09 am
Perfect! Love the last two lines!
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April 17th, 2012 at 12:50 pm
Thanks Madhu! I was not sure what kind of response I would get because a sonnet is so much different than how I normally write. I’m still not even sure if I wrote it 100% correct
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April 17th, 2012 at 12:36 pm
That is pure magic! Love It! OMG, you…are…an amazing…poet!
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April 17th, 2012 at 12:49 pm
Thanks Eva. Compliments from you make me feel successful with the work here. Sometimes I’m so into the emotions of writing something that I don’t know how it will appear to others
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April 17th, 2012 at 12:58 pm
And that is the ONLY way to write…lose yourself in it, forget the rules, forget trying to please the crowd, and just abandon the world and write about the places your soul takes you.
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April 17th, 2012 at 2:12 pm
beautiful rendition Scott!
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April 17th, 2012 at 4:44 pm
Thanks Suba!
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April 17th, 2012 at 3:50 pm
I’m such a wimp; I’m in tears. Beautiful words along with the music. The intro, is like the icing on a beautiful cake. You’re amazing Scott… I’m sorry I’m so late. I don’t get an email whenever there is a new post.
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April 17th, 2012 at 4:45 pm
Thanks Shian! Hey, no worries with being late. I always know you’ll eventually see the new stuff here 🙂
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April 17th, 2012 at 4:08 pm
Beautiful.. good evening 🙂
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April 17th, 2012 at 4:45 pm
Thanks Simona! Good evening to you!
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April 18th, 2012 at 1:30 pm
Hi Scott,
Very passionate work! I’m just a newbie poet… Thanks for checking out my site!
xo annie
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April 20th, 2012 at 1:55 pm
Thanks! I like your blog. I’m actually following now 🙂
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April 18th, 2012 at 9:48 pm
I really felt every words there! Scott,you really know how to reach our hearts.
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April 20th, 2012 at 1:58 pm
Thanks! You’re all in my hearts too, especially as I read your things. Feels like a family or something 🙂
Stay blessed
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April 20th, 2012 at 5:56 pm
Glad to know we somehow connect in a way or two. Thank you as well for your kind words. Keep Safe and Bless. 🙂
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April 18th, 2012 at 9:57 pm
You’re a romantic. Which is a good thing. Lovely sonnet.
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April 20th, 2012 at 2:45 pm
Thank you! I love being a romantic, but sometimes not sure if it’s a blessing or curse 🙂
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April 20th, 2012 at 3:42 pm
I hear ya there 😉
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April 20th, 2012 at 3:25 pm
Just beautiful Scott! God Bless 🙂
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April 25th, 2012 at 9:20 am
Thank you PJ! God bless you!
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April 24th, 2012 at 12:08 pm
I’ve been trying to write a sonnet for a few days now, but so far all I’ve had are false starts. I’m currently reading through bits and pieces of The Sonnet, an anthology of the best sonnets in the English language from the Renaissance to the 20th century (sometime in the 80s when the second edition was released). I congratulate you on going all out. Sonnets are easy to start but difficult to finish.
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April 25th, 2012 at 9:26 am
Thanks so much for the comment. Well, the sonnet I wrote here may not be perfectly legit to any standard, but I think it’s correct for the most part. I did a little of the same and analyzed some various types of historical sonnets first. Then, I tried writing about a hopeful romantic thought and it didn’t work. Well, I just wrote what flowed naturally and kept it to 10 syls per line and related each following sentence to the previous one, hopefully properly 🙂
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May 3rd, 2012 at 11:19 am
Hey Scott, wow! my first time reading your work…so much passion! very beautiful.
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May 5th, 2012 at 9:10 pm
Thank you Sara! I appreciate you taking the time to visit
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May 6th, 2012 at 12:13 pm
Very beautiful writing and your choice of music brought the love you have to life … Peace
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May 7th, 2012 at 3:24 pm
I have nominated you for the versatile bloggers award, for instructions on how to accept please check :http://boomiebol.wordpress.com/2012/05/07/another-award-mr-prick-what-say-you/
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September 19th, 2012 at 8:52 am
I cried after reading this …. What emotion!
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September 19th, 2012 at 9:04 am
Thanks Upe and sorry to make you cry 🙂
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September 25th, 2012 at 1:24 pm
I knew I’d love this as soon as I saw the title.
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January 22nd, 2013 at 11:21 am
Thanks JeLisa. Sorry for my VERY late reply lol. I’m going through older posts and caught this one. I was slacking 🙂
This sonnet poem is my personal favorite I’ve ever written and may forever be that for me.
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